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The first person to read my script is Joe Janes of Bite and Smile. Who’s Joe Janes? According to his blog:

Joe is a writer, director and actor in Chicago. He teaches at The Second City Training Center and at Columbia College. He is also a senior writer/director at Fig Media, Inc.

I met Joe at Second City and felt he was an excellent writer and teacher. He’s currently writing a new sketch every day for the entire year! Learn all about that on his blog.

Joe is also the narrator in Wheelchair Werewolf.

Anyway, he had the script for about a week and emailed me this:

Joe – I don’t think we really need to get together unless you want the in-person experience of me holding your hands and staring dreamily into your eyes and telling you how awesome the screenplay is. Because it is. Very, very funny and you better put me in it.
Minor notes
- I don’t think you need the scene in the liquor store. I think everything done and said there can happen at the party.
- The only overall plot thing I was unclear about is why is Jeff so poor? His face and name are on all these products, they’re sold everywhere, what’s the deal? I understand Marcus ripping him off, but to do so to that extreme really makes Jeff look stupid. I that’s the case. Maybe I missed something. Is he giving most of his money away to charity or something?
- Run it through a spell and grammar check.
Congratulations!
Joe

Sweet, he likes it. That’s a relief. I still have 2 more readers to discuss it with before I move forward.

I meet with the next writer tomorrow night. I’m looking forward to a conversation with another person who’s read it with a critical eye. I’ve gone over it so many times I don’t even know what’s what anymore…